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equinox, the day and the next by ~AlienDonkey:iconAlienDonkey:

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equinox/




I awaken
and feel no benefit
from wasting the night.
Just a vengeance on the alarm clock.

How tired I get
when I call this sleep.
A seven hour black-out
as if I were still awake,

though I force

a nine o’clock bedtime
of the self-denial.
But then, as always,
the rule breaks.

I’ll just watch this and head to sleep, I say.
procrastinating slumber


though were I asleep- Where was I?
The night of bones too
fatigued in mere sentence,
a gravel of rock:

A sentence of a hundred years.
A hundred words...

         [i stop.]



/



I awaken
And feel no benefit
From wasting the night.
Just a vengeance on the alarm clock.
©2006-2009 ~AlienDonkey
:iconaliendonkey:

Author's Comments

an exercise in writing. trying out some new styles of stuff, and i'll soon be using my new 5K1LLZ to write document the Deeping War.

still working... will get sleep tonight...

critique plz

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~R-J-Lupin Jan 11, 2006, 6:50:45 PM
Hm, that's usually my feelings towards sleep, as well. Never seem to actually get any less tired.

--
The ending is nearer than you think, and it is already written. All we have left to choose is the correct moment to begin.
:iconsir-integra:
~sir-integra Jan 11, 2006, 8:07:38 PM
ugh...sleep...ive been getting to much of it latly D: so weird.....i usualy stay up till 4AM and then i get up at 7AM and im like, the waking dead :D
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~UngluedAngel Jan 11, 2006, 8:20:14 PM
:jawdrog:

Very nice work :clap:

--
Education... has produced a vast population able to read but unable to distinguish what is worth reading.
:iconmgdeath5:
~mgdeath5 Jan 12, 2006, 3:59:38 PM
There's a little metaphor in there if you interpret it a certain way =)
School nights are the worst to sleep =(
:iconaliendonkey:
~AlienDonkey Jan 13, 2006, 9:59:27 AM
...too much sleep? os that possible?!

I usually try and stay in bed until lunchtime. and fail - my mum shakes my bed yelling 'earthquake'.

--
see footsteps echo in
in
in in

echo
:iconaliendonkey:
~AlienDonkey Jan 13, 2006, 10:01:07 AM
thankyou!! <3

--
see footsteps echo in
in
in in

echo
:iconaliendonkey:
~AlienDonkey Jan 13, 2006, 10:02:55 AM
always... homework plus swimming training plus relaxation = death.

ah well. thanks for the fav! <3

--
see footsteps echo in
in
in in

echo
:iconaliendonkey:
~AlienDonkey Jan 13, 2006, 10:08:46 AM
you go to sleep, awaken and then...

/

...you go to sleep and feel nothing but extra tiredness. As if you'd been sprinting for five hours.

--
see footsteps echo in
in
in in

echo
:iconsir-integra:
~sir-integra Jan 13, 2006, 9:15:54 PM
lol same here, i try mostly to sleep in on sundays because i want to skip church as i refuse to be another one of gods measly pawns(or however you spell it) on the chess board of ife (or just an other one of gods puppets) but thats a whole other story, yeah ive been sick so i wnet to bed at ike 8:30 and wake up at 10:00 its amazing how much sleep i need to catch up on since ive been staying up writing since the begining of the year!
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